>>67039
Sorry for the delayed answer, i've been slow these last couple of days.
Overall it looks like an improvement, which is what you always should try to strive towards.
For the minor details, like the other anon said, the ears are a bit thin, and they look like they come out of the back of her head, but more on that later. The OG demon is quite leggy, so the exaggerated proportions are fine here. I at least don't see much wrong, relative to the OG.
Now to the three main aspects, as all of those perceived "screw ups" circle back to them.
Let's start with pose. You took quite a difficult pose. If you examine the OG, you'll see she's not quite frontal, instead she's slightly angled, invitingly beckoning you towards her. It's quite the Jojo pose if i'm being honest. Trying to recreate it IRL is hard because it's very unnatural and unstable. It should be her other leg going forwards.
Regardless, even in these cases it's always good to analyze the pose by looking at the big landmarks, those being the hips, shoulders, knees, elbows, hands and feet. Analyze the angle between the pairs, and where they are positioned relative to each other, like the red lines in pic related. Analyzing poses and getting them right is the way to get expressive bodies.
That then causes the right hand to be floating in your pic. KC' also has this problem, but to a minor degree because the hips are angled so that the hand sort of rests on them.
Secondly is shape. Legs might be fine in terms of length, but her left leg is very thick and doesn't taper. Similarly the left arm is too straight. This is the part that requires knowledge of muscles and musclegroups, so do look into it.
Third comes the head. In general, the head can be represented as a sphere with the sides cut off. If you used that kind of guideline but forgot to cut the sphere it explains why the head is wide and the ears off. The issue with classic anime styles is that they love hiding the jaw behind hair, so if you try to copy it by just continuing the lines you'll get that result.
Drawing the guidelines for the head correctly helps you with shape and placement of features. It's quite the complicated topic, best is to study Loomis, or Asaro.
And as a minor tip, whenever you are drawing hair, draw the strands in a single swoop. Think about it like ribbons laying on top of each other(at least for this hair.)
Hopefully the image is readable enough.